First draft of a rewrite of a uni project from last year. Critique centred around not being able to engage with my main character well enough; here I’ve tried a new tactic – writing the story not from my main character’s point of view, but instead focalising via a narrator/observer character – like Watson for Sherlock. Seeing how it goes!
Little Secret
It started with a race.
Dolphin Sized Goldfish
Dolphin Sized Goldfish
When I told her I kept having dreams about riding giant goldfish like they were dolphins, she laughed at me.
Story Thief Draft Chapter 3
Dawn saw Lyra wake early in the darkness, slipping out of bed and hastily pulling on Sterlyn’s clothes, her boots and scarf, and racing to the stables. The vardo was ready to leave, but that didn’t stop her from checking it over several times, making sure the wheels were oiled, her belongings were stowed away where they couldn’t be thrown about, that the internal fixtures were secured down.
Story Thief Draft Chapter 2
Lyra repeated herself. “I want to go to the stables and see Coco,” she said.
Story Thief Draft Chapter 1
Lyra was twenty when it happened.
Erelim story – chapter 1 draft
Dawn lights up the lowest clouds first, and as the peach glow rolled over the soft hills sheltering the lowermost dwellings, Wren crept out of her family’s home.
Short Story – Nameless
Nameless
Short Story – The End
The End
Story Thief Introduction Draft
Once upon a time, there was a story.
Alison Graham 